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 Genre(s):  Sci-fi • Mystery • Action/Adventure
 Type:  Short Story
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As the Title Description says, a sickness had taken over the planet of Jooflin. Their solution to stopping it was to use Time Travel to stop it from ever happening, and they were using humans to do it.

Time for a Change  (18+) A sickness has taken over the planet of Jooflin. Only Time Travel can save them now. #2289375 by PureSciFi

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 Genre(s):  Contest Entry • Biographical • Personal
 Type:  Letter/Memo
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Can you help me make this a winning entry? All feedback will be greatly appreciated!

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Dear Me: TAKE ACTION!  (18+) Take action toward your goals in 2023! #2289014 by ruwth

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 Genre(s):  Experience • Women's • Emotional
 Type:  Poetry
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Stream of consciousness/prose style poetry. Any feedback appreciated! :)

wearing my body  (13+) a prose poem on the ownership of my own body #2288920 by Charlie Carrol

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 Genre(s):  Community • Cultural • History
 Type:  Poetry
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Worth your time.

Serpent lies...  (E) How do you begin to explain something so reality shattering? #2110735 by Perhaps

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 Genre(s):  Relationship • Psychology • Philosophy
 Type:  Poetry
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Please review

Shaman's Trance  (E) What if you are not alone in your meditation? #1942416 by Perhaps

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 Genre(s):  Romance/Love • Relationship • Emotional
 Type:  Novel
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A published author & playwright, I'm trying my hand at being a Romance Novelist. I've written an 85,000 word piece called "Words of Love~The Odyssey of Sal & Selia". This 6,174 word work is Chapter 1. Please give it a brutally honest, constructive review!

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"Memories Light the Corners of My Mind"  (13+) A Romance Novelist working on Chapter 1 of my latest book, I'm looking for HONEST REVIEWS! #2286541 by Giovannius

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 Genre(s):  Dark • Fantasy • Death
 Type:  Chapter
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Hello. I'm hoping for some feedback on a prologue chapter to a longer work of dark, gothic fantasy. 3400 words.

Invalid Item  This item number is not valid. #2283568 by Not Available.

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 Genre(s):  Action/Adventure • Experience • Other
 Type:  Other
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I've created a story based on an experience of a dream. I appreciate your review and your opinions of my written dream.

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A Dream I  (E) A dream entry I: A Strange Man #2242308 by Alisha P. 🤔

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 Genre(s):  Adult • Fantasy • Contest
 Type:  Short Story
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Looking for feedback.

Mari  (13+) Magic Words Contest Entry #2287239 by Andrew W

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 Genre(s):  Drama • Dark • Mystery
 Type:  Fiction
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Looking for any and all critical comments for this story. It's the first I've finished in over a year!!! I am happy to review your works as well!

New Dawn Fades  (13+) A man takes a special trip... #2241195 by T.S. Garp

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 Genre(s):  Action/Adventure • Fantasy • Sci-fi
 Type:  Novel
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Looking for a beta reader. I want this story to be cohesive and well written. Thanks for your time.

Karma  (18+) A man trying to carve out a piece of life for himself in the universe. #2201501 by Octavius

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • Horror/Scary • Other
 Type:  Short Story
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A young husband feels out of place in his village of peasants and longs for a magical life.

He turns to the dangerous neighbor in the necropolis.

The Time of No Harvest  (18+) Will Fredek complete his oath or forfeit all things to the Necromancer of Felman Hill? #2220341 by Joto-Kai

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 Genre(s):  Folklore • Holiday • Supernatural
 Type:  Short Story
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Looking for feedback on the story, more so than grammar and mechanics.

Winter Time  (ASR) Flash Fiction (547 words) #2286210 by Andrew W

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 Genre(s):  Dark • Action/Adventure • Death
 Type:  Collection
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Hello! I worked hard on a poignant and powerful imagery to convey the main themes of my poem titled "Splendor". Please let me know if it is strong enough, and what you like and dislike about it? Thank you!

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Poetry  (13+) My collection of various poems. #1973974 by Cat Carroll

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 Genre(s):  Friendship • Drama • Teen
 Type:  Short Story
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How are they doing?

Markey Mark and Scouse Les.  (18+) Trying for holiday money. #2284174 by Bruce.

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 Genre(s):  Sci-fi • Action/Adventure • Drama
 Type:  Short Story
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Yanica was a seventy-five-foot Kovinan that came alive every three hundred years to challenge the Kovinans living on her Land Mass. If they can survive her challenge, they can continue living there. That year they think that they can do it.

Mentally and Physically  (18+) A mental or physical challenge would save this Land Mass. This year they may just do it. #2286741 by PureSciFi

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 Genre(s):  Comedy • Relationship • Young Adult
 Type:  Short Story
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Just wrote a short story for a blog post series. Reviews and critique about effectiveness in story-telling would be appreciated.

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Opening the Jar of Tomato Sauce  (E) Short story about accepting help... and opening a jar of tomato sauce. #2286722 by Eliza West

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • Dark • Thriller/Suspense
 Type:  Fiction
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* Is the protagonist engaging, distinctive and interesting, with a clear goal?
* Is the conflict (internal and external) clear and believable?
* Does the outcome clearly result from the protagonists strengths/weaknesses/actions
Thanks in advance.

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Broken Birthday  (18+) A crippled youth loses his parents and his home to vicious raiders #2286652 by Grayt Expectations for 2023

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 Genre(s):  Romance/Love • History • Other
 Type:  Chapter
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Brand new genre for me. Looking to make sure I'm spoon feeding character background and not forcing it down. Also, obviously, does the tone match the regency romance genre?

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Paths We Choose: Choosing Joy (Ch 1)  (13+) Juliet is confronted with meeting the man who now owns her family estate. #2286142 by Sarah Rae

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 Genre(s):  Dark • Drama • Thriller/Suspense
 Type:  Fiction
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Curious about reactions to the plot and ending.

I really worked on the characterization here--was it effective?

NOT looking for comments about mechanics, punctuation etc.

Seeking Sandra  (18+) An old man discovers that his granddaughter is not quite what she seemed. #2284052 by Grayt Expectations for 2023

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 Genre(s):  Other • Other • Other
 Type:  Fiction
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.Story of the child who created light.

Oni - Chapter 1  (E) The first chapter of my book about the characters omnipower, omnipresence, and omniscience #2280496 by Mark Diaz

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 Genre(s):  Romance/Love • Personal • Friendship
 Type:  Short Story
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Please be transparent.

The Girl  (E) A vignette on the stories that live in us and make us who we are. #2285283 by Jack Stone

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 Genre(s):  Emotional • Psychology • Other
 Type:  Poetry
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Please review my free form poem. Thanks

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Numb  (E) A creeping sensation #2285043 by StephBee Happy 2023

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 Genre(s):  Dark • Action/Adventure • Thriller/Suspense
 Type:  Fiction
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Hello, could I please get some feedback on this?

Extinct  (ASR) fist chapter of the start of my new novel #2284652 by Rturner19936

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • Action/Adventure • Supernatural
 Type:  Short Story
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The latest tale in my On Dragons Wings saga, introducing some new characters into the fold. The first three tales can also be found in my portfolio

Elves, Barbarians, and Dragons...Oh My!  (E) Part 4 of the On Dragons Wings saga, introducing some new oddballs #2259818 by Author Joseph J. Madden

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 Genre(s):  Sci-fi • Writing • None
 Type:  Chapter
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Just looking for feedback on this, the first chapter in my latest WIP. There is also a prologue available to read (and review?) as well in my portfolio.

Huntress Chapter One  (E) First chapter of my WIP, Huntress, a spin-off to my series The Starhawk Chronicles #2284591 by Author Joseph J. Madden

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 Genre(s):  Comedy • Drama • Mystery
 Type:  Chapter
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Please, review this. Tell me how I did!

Invalid Item  This item number is not valid. #2284342 by Not Available.

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 Genre(s):  Horror/Scary • Fantasy • Sci-fi
 Type:  Handbook
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Looking for some reviews for my more recent entries.

Short Stories and poems  (18+) A collection of various short stories and poetry. #1670440 by BIG BAD WOLF is Merry

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 Genre(s):  Adult • Dark • Death
 Type:  Fiction
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Happy Halloween! How about reading about a spooky radio?

Nulled Terror  (GC) The shadow of a doubt crept closer as Delis realised there was no way out... Srtchsss... #1643199 by safire_diaz

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • Dark • Steampunk
 Type:  Novel
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I am looking for feedback on the first chapter of my book. I'm most curious to know how good a "hook" it is. And because this is a translation, I would like your opinion on the quality of the English text.

Thank you!

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Smoke Night  (18+) "We used to eat each other for survival. Now we do it because it feels good." #2283667 by Peter Benedict

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 Genre(s):  Drama • Inspirational • Other
 Type:  Fiction
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I have rewritten the first draft. I am looking for reviews before continuing with the plot. Thank you!

A Petulant Life  (E) Violet lived life on the edge. No one would get the best of her... No one except herself. #2096571 by Chasing Grace

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • Romance/Love • Other
 Type:  Short Story
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Lighthearted (they survive) Faerietale Romeo and Juliet. Monster heroine {or hero?) I did first develop a culture. Looking for any feedback, and sensitivity readers/sensitivity opinions solicited. DNF reviews included. Tell me I've my head where it...

The Trick-Blade Engagement  (18+) Kreesh quests for love among the most dangerous, beautiful-faerie race her people know.... #2028694 by Joto-Kai

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 Genre(s):  Romance/Love • Adult • Writing
 Type:  Critique
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this is about my thoughts of someone that i may be wasting my time. but how to stop it from continuing, is another "story" to be told at another time.

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Outside These Walls   (E) Emotions inside the work area, has no buisness. (10/18/2022) #2282708 by Serena Blade

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 Genre(s):  Sci-fi • Paranormal • None
 Type:  Short Story
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A sci-fi short story, intended to be a kind of Twilight Zone feel. Interested in feedback on plot, pace, and whether the story and characters are credible and engaging.

Quantum Memories  (13+) A professor of physics is left with troubling questions during a visit to Prague. #2282278 by Damon Nomad

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • Other • Other
 Type:  Other
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Please let me know what you think. This is an ongoing book, I hope to publish.

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Reposted:Ch 1: Treasure of Richard Green  (E) Corrected Richard Greene uses his vacation to explore The Isle of Skye. #2036140 by Starling

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 Genre(s):  Crime/Gangster • Mystery • Other
 Type:  Fiction
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Just an exercise in tone and effective use of omniscient narration. I want to know if it's effectively conveying the mood and enhancing the back and forth exchange. Constructive critique requested.

Tell Me Sumthin'  (13+) Tense exchange between opposing sides looking for stolen money with a murder thrown in. #2281804 by Daisan

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 Genre(s):  Action/Adventure • Fantasy • Other
 Type:  Fiction
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Looking for feedback on the story, characters as well as where prose can be improved.

HAGSBANE, PART 1  (13+) The wold is shifting from the Age of the Novissime Empire in to an unknown future. #2280690 by Surgec

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 Genre(s):  Women's • Comedy • Cultural
 Type:  Poetry
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All comments/help welcomed and appreciated.

IT"S NOT YOUR DAY  (E) Assumptions are not always good. #2280967 by Marrikasala

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 Genre(s):  Inspirational • Self Help • Experience
 Type:  Poetry
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Over the years my writing has covered many themes. I love poetry, short stories, novels. I do not have a favorite style if I can call it that. I would just like to know if my thoughts can be relatable. I am braced for any feedback.

Loneliness  (E) In spite of the thorns... #2279461 by Marrikasala

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 Genre(s):  Cultural • Writing.Com • Computers
 Type:  Poetry
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Just a few words will do. Is it any good? Does it need amending? Is there a fun message in it? Any honest opinions welcomed
Brian Pontypridd Wales

The app-eal of Apps ?  (E) Are we letting apps take over our lives? It seems like it doesn't it? #2280404 by mix n match

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 Genre(s):  Sci-fi • Contest Entry • Horror/Scary
 Type:  Fiction
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Science Fiction. Please review with constructive critical comments.

The Coin   (E) Any sufficiently advanced technology? #2279653 by JJR2

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 Genre(s):  Philosophy • Experience • Nonsense
 Type:  Essay
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Honest opinions. Whatever you thought, tell me. I just thank you for reading it!

Humanity's Question of Existence   (E) The ability of a human being to introspect and see where it leads them. #2279850 by BlakeFran3

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 Genre(s):  Philosophy • Arts • Cultural
 Type:  Poetry
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Could you please review? Thanks,!

The Binding of the Young  (E) Haiku(Senryu) early asian culture...footbinding #2279638 by Scotty1615

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 Genre(s):  Action/Adventure • Crime/Gangster • Other
 Type:  Fiction
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This is the first chapter of a planned longer work. Please let me know of any typos, errors, or anything else. I appreciate all the help I can get. I'm new to writing in general.

Ben There- Chapter 1  (18+) Being hung up in a basement wasn't my idea of fun. Then again, I didn't have much choice. #2277935 by Weaveroftalltales

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 Genre(s):  Emotional • Community • Family
 Type:  Fiction
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Please review this story of mine for its interest and flow. Any and all suggestions and thoughts are welcome. Thank you!!

Joys of Little Things in Life  (E) A religious feast in a village in Goa,India & a lonely old woman, her days and hopes #2279181 by Ruthie4u

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 Genre(s):  Supernatural • Contest Entry • Young Adult
 Type:  Short Story
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Appreciate the feedback.

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Darlene  (E) A fortune teller doesn't believe in magic. #2279273 by StephBee Happy 2023

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 Genre(s):  Experience • Personal • Psychology
 Type:  Poetry
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I've edited a poem written during the first covid lock-down, hope it stirs some memories for you

Back in my day  (13+) A poem, written during covid lock-down mourning the loss of love and life itself. #2279020 by willy

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 Genre(s):  Other • None • None
 Type:  Poetry
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Back again, I would love to hear peoples thoughts on this one.

Ode to music the poisonous antidote.   (E) This poem describes a time when I was depressed and listening was unbearable for me. #2278996 by Sammy

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 Genre(s):  Other • None • None
 Type:  Poetry
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Hello again I would be delighted if you could review this to please :)

A murder ballad  (13+) not sure how to describe this one #2278910 by Sammy

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 Genre(s):  Comedy • None • None
 Type:  Fiction
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I have been a storyteller for decades and want to transition into becoming a writer.

This is an attempt to work on the dialog.

A Matter of Priorities  (E) Story all in Dialog at a baseball game #2278069 by Charley

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