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 Genre(s):  Horror/Scary • Dark • Ghost
 Type:  Short Story
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I plan to submit this for publication in a magazine. Please share your honest opinion, even if it's difficult to hear. At the end of your critique, please let me know if you think this is ready for publication. If not, what needs to be fixed?

Lucas  (GC) Lucas didn’t believe in ghosts...until one refused to let him die. #2321393 by Shawn Odette

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 Genre(s):  Contest Entry • War • Opinion
 Type:  Essay
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Let me know if you think the paper makes a plausible argument. Are there things missing? Does it flow?

Thanks for any comments

We Want Peace  (E) An essay entry for the We Want Peace Contest, July 2025 996 words. #2344112 by findingfeet

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 Genre(s):  None • None • None
 Type:  Fiction
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Hi, This is a short science fiction story about a quiet alien invasion. I'm looking for feedback on everything but particularly interested to know if it leaves you with a lasting impression.

Thanks in advance.

Motes  (18+) A short sci fi Story #2344209 by Dunstan Whitethorn

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 Genre(s):  Cultural • Philosophy • Spiritual
 Type:  Poetry
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Hi,

Could I please get some reviews to let me know what you think of this piece of poetry? Thank you.

Summer Hopes  (E) asian culture #2344146 by Scotty1615

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 Genre(s):  Music • None • None
 Type:  Lyrics
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One of a few attempts at 'meaningful' lyrics - that I've tweaked several times - would appreciate any feedback / critique on musicality. refinements imagery / metaphor, etc to make it better. Thanks in advance!

Lyrics - The Other Side v.2.27  (E) Another major revision... Am I happy now? #2343585 by DS

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 Genre(s):  Spiritual • Philosophy • Self Help
 Type:  Other
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Loneliness is a common curse among creatives, but it animates our art. Reviews of the writing are always respected, but I confess my main motivation is to assist all afflicted by this ailment. I hope this helps.

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The Luster of Loneliness  (E) A letter to the lonely, and a summons to the Soldiers of Solitude. #2342426 by Xenos Pseudonymous

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 Genre(s):  Fanfiction • Cultural • Other
 Type:  Fiction
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A little piece I wrote after having been inspired by the movie Sinners. Had fun writing it and would appreciate any constructive critique you'd like to provide.

Slim  (18+) A youngster on a train in the deep south unknowingly unlocks a part of his destiny. #2342330 by Daisan

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 Genre(s):  Romance/Love • None • None
 Type:  Short Story
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Hey Everyone,
I believe I'm stumbling into compiling a book of short stories. Please check this one out and let me know of your thoughts!

Four and a Half Minutes of Almost  (E) A moment shared. A silence held. Four and a half minutes that might have meant everything. #2342155 by GreenLion93

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 Genre(s):  Crime/Gangster • Mystery • Other
 Type:  Fiction
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Request review of how well the story flows and if there are elements that bear improving. This is part of a novel I'm working on and is where things are about to take off. Southern crime noir set in the deep south of the 1950s.

The Men From Macon  (18+) Strangers always seem to bring bad tidings or bad luck. #2341984 by Daisan

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 Genre(s):  Supernatural • Paranormal • Emotional
 Type:  Short Story
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This is my third short story, this time I'm trying my hand at supernatural. Does it work?

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Many Careful Owners  (E) A vintage American car with a deadly past leads to a fatal accident for its new owners. #2341951 by Bill Whyte

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 Genre(s):  Drama • Dark • Technology
 Type:  Short Story
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This is my second short story. After taking on board the issues with my first I'm having another go. Please be kind, unless it's really rotten of course...

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Hey, is that your new phone?  (E) Chilling events tied to a glitching AI phone turns stolen prototypes into a global crisis. #2340617 by Bill Whyte

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 Genre(s):  Relationship • Romance/Love • Drama
 Type:  Prose
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Seeking honest criticism on strengths and weaknesses and wanting to gain a viewpoint on how different people view my work.

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A Guilty Hand  (13+) Perhaps this was truly a test of my love. #2341739 by IV

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 Genre(s):  Action/Adventure • Family • Drama
 Type:  Short Story
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The Svenson family is on vacation in a foreign country. They are visiting several cities in this country, and the last six have been beautiful. This family thinks the next one may be a paradise, but they are also having some problems getting there.

Paradise Awaits?  (13+) Everyone has a vacation they will never forget. This is that vacation for the Svensons. #2341638 by PureSciFiPlus

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 Genre(s):  Mystery • Ghost • Paranormal
 Type:  Novella
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A new novella I'm working on. Let me know what you think.

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Ellsworth and the Haunting of Room 319  (13+) While working as a traveling CNA, Chelsea learns the rehab center she works at is haunted. #2340140 by KDM-1984

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 Genre(s):  Romance/Love • LGBTQ+ • Teen
 Type:  Fiction
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Please be harsh with your critiques I can take it.

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Airplanes  (13+) Two grounded teens exchange paper planes and fall in love, without ever seeing each other. #2340666 by Ethan Wolverton

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 Genre(s):  Opinion • Personal • Writing.Com
 Type:  Prose
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Trying my hand at some blog-type, non-fiction opinion pieces. Is this entertaining to read? Interesting? Should I do more? Any feedback on writing style is welcome, too! Thanks!

The Problem with Writing  (E) Originally a blog post, now a static item -- wanted an easier way to share it. #2340391 by L.A.Saxe

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 Genre(s):  Sci-fi • Thriller/Suspense • Crime/Gangster
 Type:  Short Story
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Ginen is a Taker. He has been Taking things from the planet Zeeon for almost all of his adult life. Lately, he has been Taking the six of the other nineteen SpaceGems on Zeeon he hasn’t taken so far. He still hasn’t Taken the one he wants most of all.

SpaceGems  (18+) Ginen has been looking for a specific SpaceGem. What will he do after he finds it? #2340200 by PureSciFi

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • Fanfiction • Tragedy
 Type:  Fiction
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I'm writing a fanfic for a friend's character, and I'd like some input before sending it to him! I've covered much of his story, and a lot had to be omitted for the sake of the story, so I'm curious to know if it still works as a stand-alone.

Love for rose's thorns  (13+) Can a man who committed countless atrocities love himself? #2339931 by Esion

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 Genre(s):  Writing • Personal • Philosophy
 Type:  Poetry
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I’d love any input on this free verse poem. Please just tell me what you think.

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I’ve lived a thousand lives  (ASR) A free verse poem about immersive narration #2340069 by Christopher Roy Denton

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • Mythology • Scientific
 Type:  Poetry
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Hello, I wrote this piece, called "Merge." I'd like to know what more serious writers think of it.

I realize the rhymes are a bit weak. but comments about how i could make better schemes from the style I use would help me tremendously.

Merge  (E) This piece is about a different side of nature some humans interact with. #2339518 by asylum

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 Genre(s):  Biographical • Personal • None
 Type:  Poetry
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Looking for someone to review my first short poem.

Life's Repeat  (ASR) A short poem about some parts of my life. First time writing poetry. #2339452 by Rowan Oakenscale

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 Genre(s):  None • None • None
 Type:  Fiction
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Hello, while this story is incomplete I still would greatly value feedback, thank you!

Trial by Fairy  (13+) An Orc stands trial for killing a human (Incomplete due to writers block) please be honest #2339155 by Fake Nate

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 Genre(s):  Sci-fi • None • None
 Type:  Fiction
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Part of a cycle of sci-fi stories called The Exiles. Looking for honest opinions and critique. I know I can always do something better: any ideas?

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All the New Gods  (13+) Polides rules the new world, and the path to the old gods is closed. But by whom? #2337539 by Jeffrey Meyer

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 Genre(s):  None • None • None
 Type:  Short Story
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Second chapter of a story I'm working on. i'd appreciate a review on it. though please spare us any confusion about the story itself by reading the first chapter. thank you.

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Memories by colours(2)  (E) Chapter 2: Green of a new chance #2338057 by Howl

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • Action/Adventure • Death
 Type:  Chapter
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Hello, I am asking for someone to honestly review this chapter of what I am currently making. I ask for no special treatment, just honest reviews.

Chapter One of With Masked Eyes  (13+) This is the first chapter. Quick note: this is just kind of a rough draft. #2337257 by Rowan Oakenscale

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 Genre(s):  Political • Philosophy • Psychology
 Type:  Poetry
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Please review and let me know what you think! I warn you....it is political so I would appreciate if you just focus on the poetry itself. Thank you!

Narcissistic Drama  (13+) Political state of the United States and it's possible correction. #2338427 by Scotty1615

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 Genre(s):  Music • Romance/Love • Relationship
 Type:  Poetry
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They take a deep dive into the emotions I felt after I lost my first love to Alcohol addiction. Not lost in the sense that he passed away, but they he became consumed by the addiction. I would love you to have a read and hear your thoughts :)

Echoes of Us  (E) . A poignant narrative about the lasting impact of a past relationship. #2337706 by Warm_Ri_Gards

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 Genre(s):  Nature • None • None
 Type:  Short Story
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my first story in years, so i want to see how the first chapter does. thank your in advance for your patience and review

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Memories by colours(1):Blue of hope  (E) first chapter of many for the first story i wrote in years. this is a work of fiction. #2337817 by Howl

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 Genre(s):  Paranormal • Detective • Writing.Com
 Type:  Short Story
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A short story about a private detective. It's a work in progress, and I'm adding chapters as I go. Would love some feedback on how I'm doing so far! Any tips or pointers on how to improve would be incredible. Thanks!

Another Day in Paradise  (E) A work in progress short story about a private detective. Adding chapters as I go. Cheers! #2337333 by L.A.Saxe

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • Dark • Action/Adventure
 Type:  Chapter
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I have just written the first chapter of medieval fantasy novel. It involves an emperor who wants to protect his daughter form the e forces who are attacking the kingdom.

Marissa's Return C1  (18+) The emperor is concerned with his daughter being in Cyka, #2336872 by Richard Allen Edwards

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 Genre(s):  Cultural • History • Family
 Type:  Short Story
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Just read and tell me what you think, is it good enough to publish?

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Bacon Biscuits and Fried Pies  (E) A nostalgic piece about ordinary people set in the 1930s and early1940s in USA #2336896 by Prier

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • LGBTQ+ • None
 Type:  Fiction
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Second attempt at putting this story together. Could use some outside opinions to help me see what's working and what isn't. Fair warning, this is about 8 pages long, so definitely not a short story.

A Debt to Darkness - Chapter 1  (13+) Opening chapter at a first novel attempt. Lilith Underhill is trapped in a backwards city. #2336877 by Intoxikatie

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 Genre(s):  Children's • Children's • None
 Type:  Short Story
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This is my first Children's story. I haven't decided if it's publishable, but I'm looking for help to improve.

The Brothers and the Allegory Rose   (E) A short story about not letting your heart harden. Aimed at younger kids #2336672 by GreenLion93

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 Genre(s):  Philosophy • Death • Other
 Type:  Short Story
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Is the timing, theme, and overall feeling working? Are the small details saying what I want them to say? Saying something else? Saying nothing?
Let me know!
Thanks in advance

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Time  (E) You got another chance in life. To restart knowing what you know today. Would you do it? #2195865 by Mark Diaz

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 Genre(s):  Romance/Love • Drama • Family
 Type:  Short Story
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First draft of a story that I’d like to continue and would like reviews on

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A Love Beyond Pain  (13+) Greg longs to hear the word, "Daddy," but he's given up hope. #2333086 by Charles 🐾

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • None • None
 Type:  Fiction
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My first attempt writing Fantasy. I want to do good right out of the gate - all opinions / critiques welcomed.

Dogwood  (18+) Chapter one (incomplete). #2335935 by BoB_618

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 Genre(s):  Romance/Love • Tragedy • Animal
 Type:  Short Story
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This is the first short story submission I've posted to WdC, and twas the second one I've ever written. This is redrafted revised version 3. I am open to any and all feedback.

Are You Sleeping?  (18+) Would-be actor John O'Malley is resigned to his farming life in the Ozarks. #2335900 by Conrad Moriarty

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 Genre(s):  Action/Adventure • Fantasy • None
 Type:  Chapter
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Continuation from the prologue of Blackstone Cove. This is a large chapter; 5265 words. How's the tone, the pacing and the action? Is the voicing enjoyable? Does it hold your interest? Because it's so large, it awards 5000 GPs. Thanks!

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Chapter 1: Call of the Sea  (18+) Chapter 1 of Brightstone Cove #2336286 by J. M. Kraynak

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 Genre(s):  Melodrama • Action/Adventure • Young Adult
 Type:  Fiction
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Just a small snippet I wrote as practice! I’ve never written combat before, so I thought to give it a shot. If there’s anything I can improve to make the fight better, please let me know! Thank you so much for your time in advance.

Dance With Death  (18+) Practice exercise. It's my first attempt at a combat scene. Reviews/criticisms welcome! #2335884 by cha0ticditz

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 Genre(s):  Action/Adventure • Fantasy • Comedy
 Type:  Chapter
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Had this story in my head for a little while and figured I'd try to put it to paper. What are your thoughts on the prologue? Is the tone and voice good? Is the action gripping? Not supe worried about grammar right now, but if you want to, lemme know.

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Blackstone Cove  (18+) Opening scene #2335885 by J. M. Kraynak

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 Genre(s):  Sci-fi • Political • History
 Type:  Fiction
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This is a portion of a larger story originally intended to be a prologue. It is now just background world-building. I'm looking for general thoughts and suggestions regarding this as a reference to a larger work in progress.

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The History of Mars  (E) A brief history of the Martian Colony #2335702 by PCGuyIV

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 Genre(s):  Sci-fi • Horror/Scary • Philosophy
 Type:  Short Story
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Through fractured transmissions, former allies clash as AI autonomy spirals beyond control.

Would love feedback on what I think is a pretty solid epistolary sc-fi horror... of sorts. It's a 5.7k word short story. Would love your insights. And readership

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Transmissions from Terran Mars  (E) Through fractured transmissions, former allies clash as AI autonomy spirals beyond control #2335547 by Edified Ronin

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • Mystery • Teen
 Type:  Short Story
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I wanted to capture the emotions of a character who wakes up and comes to the realization they suffer from amnesia. Who is he truly? And what about who he was before?

How did I do? Where can I improve? Is my prose any good?

Fire in the snow  (13+) I wake up once again in the snowy field, clueless as ever of who I should be. #2307892 by Esion

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 Genre(s):  Romance/Love • Food/Cooking • Travel
 Type:  Poetry
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I'm a little unimpressed by my rhyming scheme and some word choices. Does the surrealism create an invitation to the narrator's psyche? My food for thought...

The Beauty Queen  (13+) A working title #2335287 by Conrad Moriarty

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 Genre(s):  Sci-fi • Scientific • Philosophy
 Type:  Fiction
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Jonah debates an AI over sentience, but when Solace makes a deliberate mistake, Jonah is left questioning everything.
Looking for feedback on tension, dialogue, and theme. Honest reviews appreciated! Will review in return.

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The Last Argument  (E) An AI debates its own humanity—then does something Jonah can’t explain. #2335132 by Edified Ronin

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 Genre(s):  Technology • Fantasy • Thriller/Suspense
 Type:  Short Story
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I am looking for an honest review with suggestions for improvement.

I wrote this with the intention that it would be a character introduction in a book, however I am not sure how successful it is.

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Skelton Security  (13+) Jackie Skelton assesses the security of a bank and we learn a little about her. #2330533 by ZombeeLuv

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 Genre(s):  Drama • Comedy • Writing
 Type:  Fiction
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Please review my prose -- is it any good? any bad? Thanks and have a great day!

Poo  (13+) based on a true story #2334158 by sa_xe

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 Genre(s):  Drama • Holiday • Comedy
 Type:  Chapter
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Any and all feedback welcome - Thank you in advance

Glitter, Glam, and Gutter Games  (E) Glittering chaos erupts as secrets, schemes, and comedy collides in a wild glamorous saga! #2333274 by betsie

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 Genre(s):  Family • Transportation • None
 Type:  Poetry
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Trying to get this poem ship-shape for potential submission to publications. Thanks in advance, happy to reward helpful reviews!

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Changing Scenery  (E) Thoughts on a train ride from Boston to Georgia (Writer's Cramp winner) #2331370 by Andrew

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 Genre(s):  Action/Adventure • Technology • Fantasy
 Type:  Short Story
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Hello, folks! Thanks for reading and reviewing. I'd love to know if it flows well, if it's believable (if Bridgetta is believable, according to the context), and if some descriptions are lacking (like, should I describe Bridgetta and others more?).

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A Day at the Market  (E) Bridgetta is back at the market again. Except she noticed weird things she hadn't before. #2332716 by Cat Carroll

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