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 Genre(s):  LGBTQ+ • Relationship • Sports
 Type:  Novella
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While this is a chapter, it's a shorter one and should be an easy read. I'm especially interested in a review from someone who understands women's soccer and can let me know of any continuity errors I might have. Also, do you like it? Thank you!

The Woman in Red  (GC) Ever fallen for someone you shouldn't? (WIP) #2305712 by Victoria

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 Genre(s):  Emotional • Inspirational • Drama
 Type:  Poetry
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Thanks in advance for your review!

Soul Full Butterfly  (E) Freeform poetry: Ode to my mother #2309415 by Scotty1615

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 Genre(s):  Sci-fi • None • None
 Type:  Novel
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General impressions. Do you want to read the next chapter

The Time Engineers - Chapter 1   (E) 1st Chapter of a Science Fiction Book #2309427 by CLamb

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 Genre(s):  Dark • Horror/Scary • Psychology
 Type:  Poetry
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Thanks in advance for your review. Poetry..

SHADOW FIGURES  (E) A haunting poem #2305611 by Scotty1615

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 Genre(s):  Romance/Love • Drama • Adult
 Type:  Chapter
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Does this keep the reader interested.

Eddie and Dave. Ch 1.   (18+) Eddie and Anne meet Demo Dave at The Two Puddings. #1973429 by Bruce.

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 Genre(s):  Comedy • Experience • History
 Type:  Poetry
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An old poem that caused me to smile when I happened upon it Hope you share my odd sense of humour.

Big Mac  (13+) Sometimes even kindness is too much - written ages ago when I had some imagination #2308622 by willy

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 Genre(s):  Sci-fi • Fanfiction • Fantasy
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Thoughts, impressions, whatever comes to mind.
For example, do you agree with any of the material?
Does this puzzle fit the genres?
What might have you done differently?
Are the clues helpful?
Presentation (eg Colors, Dropnotes, Spacing, Font)?

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You know it's Sci Fi when...  (ASR) Themes, Elements, and Tropes. Some things that Science Fiction is best known for. #2308178 by the last cicada

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 Genre(s):  Comedy • Children's • Biographical
 Type:  Short Story
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A short, simple short story for your delight. The first story I've written for some long time.

Try, Try, and Try Again  (E) An inspiring tale of hope #2308042 by willy

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 Genre(s):  Dark • Drama • Other
 Type:  Short Story
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A short story in the style of a letter I've written, set in the same world as another story I'm currently working on. This is the first ever real piece of writing that I've released for people to actually read and would love some honest review.

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DIRECTIVE VIOLATION NOTICE #90013  (ASR) Dear Cecilia Hutto, you have violated directive 102-A, you will be penalized accordingly #2308009 by George Mallin

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 Genre(s):  Death • Other • Other
 Type:  Lyrics
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Looking for honest reviews.

Lifeless  (ASR) I'm looking down at a lifeless body #1945016 by taylor paape

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 Genre(s):  Community • Cultural • History
 Type:  Poetry
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Please review. Worth your time. Thank you.

Serpent lies...  (E) How do you begin to explain something so reality shattering? #2110735 by Perhaps

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 Genre(s):  Military • History • War
 Type:  Poetry
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This was written for "HONORING OUR VETERANS". I will not edit it further until after the contest. I'd like honest, helpful feedback, please don't worry about hurting my feelings! Poetry: 12 lines, Alternating Stanzas of 9 & 6 Syllables, AB Rhyme Scheme.

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Faded Blue  (E) The cap may fade, but the memories and dreams never will. #2307166 by Richard ~ Decorating Elf

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 Genre(s):  Emotional • None • None
 Type:  Poetry
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enjoy and critique

Brown Eyes  (E) She has them..OH YES #2300883 by strlcuckoo

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 Genre(s):  Emotional • None • None
 Type:  Poetry
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Enjoy and critique

Tough Thoughts  (E) Telling of what I missed, fool. #2307155 by strlcuckoo

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 Genre(s):  Western • Action/Adventure • Drama
 Type:  Fiction
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Second part two a western piece I'm tinkering with. Makes more sense if you've read that first part but still holds up by itself (I think). Still, I'd like any constructive criticism you may have.

Sam Platte 2  (13+) While the cowboys sleep, their enemies plot their demise. #2287619 by Daisan

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • Contest Entry • Writing.Com
 Type:  Fiction
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A little flash fiction. I'm working on writing style. Please let me know if this style of writing is worth using to write a longer piece. Thanks!

The Old-Fashioned Way  (E) Flash fiction contest entry. #2307018 by L.A.Saxe

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 Genre(s):  Drama • Dark • History
 Type:  Short Story
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Originally written for a contest, I have found that this side story for two characters from a NaNo project has great potential in serving as a sort of historical record. How well do you think it details the emotional turmoil of a specific time and place?

Adrift in the Aftermath  (13+) Birthdays and violence really don't mix. #2268661 by Elisa, Snowman Stik

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 Genre(s):  History • Military • Romance/Love
 Type:  Sample
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Alternative history about Jean D'arc from France. Long explanation about the Hundred years' war between England and France and conversation in French.(Translated in English at pilot episode).

Another Jean D'arc story.  (13+) In 1428, Jean of Domremy meets one company captain. How her and his destiny changes? #2306197 by kimauge

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 Genre(s):  Romance/Love • Biographical • Other
 Type:  Prose
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Heyy,
This is my first story and I wholud like some feedback.
Any type of constructive criticism is appreciate!

The one that doesn’t exist   (E) A made a mistake but I whould probably do it again for him #2306079 by mia

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 Genre(s):  Fanfiction • Sci-fi • Romance/Love
 Type:  Short Story
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Suddenly 22c orphan boy Philip K. Karrins fell into the movie "Knives out"
This is just a pilot. Attention to conversation between Marta and Blac. And then what Philip saying

Another Knives Out: Philip Story  (E) Suddenly 22c orphan boy Philip K. Karrins fell into the movie "Knives out" and met Marta. #2306130 by kimauge

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 Genre(s):  Sci-fi • Action/Adventure • Drama
 Type:  Short Story
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Charis sees Petronis and his wives returning to town. But something is terribly wrong. She will have to overcome the culture of the desert world, as well as another outsider, or no one’s getting out alive. [Email for passkey.]

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Outsiders [revision 2]  (E) Charis sees Petronis and his wives returning to town. But something is terribly wrong. #2306015 by JJ Robinson II

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 Genre(s):  Biographical • History • Experience
 Type:  Chapter
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I'm looking for in-depth, honest reviews. Besides any edits, I'd love to know how you feel about this piece. Is it engaging/entertaining? Would you want to read further?

Chapter One: Finding Two Spark  (E) Owning property is different than dreaming of owning property. Way different. #2304906 by SSpark

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 Genre(s):  Death • Religious • Nature
 Type:  Short Story
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My first writing for a few years - a Writer's Cramp contest entry with the prompt "The Long Journey Home". Thank you for reading!

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The Long Journey Home  (ASR) Home is where the art is... Writer's Cramp winner! #2305462 by Malister

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 Genre(s):  Action/Adventure • Mystery • Tragedy
 Type:  Fiction
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Quick concept chapter...reworking an old idea for a story that's been in my head for ages. Quick read. Is intriguing enough for you?

Terabytes and Graphene  (E) Opening/chapter 1 with hook...a love story, essentially #2304978 by Wrath.of.Khan

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 Genre(s):  Drama • History • Romance/Love
 Type:  Novel
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A historical drama with a bit of mystery, a little of the paranormal, and a generous helping of romance. I would love any kind of feedback on this novel, especially anything past chapter ten. Thanks!

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Shadow of the White Woods  (18+) Exiled to a village in medieval Denmark, Stígandr struggles to right a wrong. (complete) #2300925 by K Renée (on the road)

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 Genre(s):  Ghost • Other • Other
 Type:  
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Please review Chapter 2 of the Haunting of Stone Mountain Lodge; check syntax, clarity, typos, and reader's enjoyment. GQ

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Chapter 2 The Long Drive to Montana  (13+) Amanda Stewart, with Uncle Jim & Aunt Agatha, begin the long drive to Montana. #2302851 by GaelicQueen

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 Genre(s):  Ghost • Mystery • Other
 Type:  Novella
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Please read Chapter 1 of The Haunting of Stone Mountain Lodge, check for syntax, clarity, weakly written sentence and did you find it enjoyable enough to read further. Thank you for your time and comments. GaelicQueen

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The Haunting of Stone Mountain Lodge  (13+) Amanda Stewart inherits a mansion and discovers it is haunted by the original owners. #2304619 by GaelicQueen

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 Genre(s):  Sci-fi • Other • Other
 Type:  
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Folder, contains chapters 1-5 of a complete novel. Need reviews &comments.

"It is written that the road to damnation is broad, and easily negotiated. It was with such ease that a decisive nexus of human history came and passed, almost unnoticed."

The Confederation: Disunion  (13+) The Confederation: Disunion novel #2300733 by JJ Robinson II

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 Genre(s):  Drama • Religious • Cultural
 Type:  Short Story
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Starving author looking for feedback on a piece I believe has merit. Interested in being a better all-around writer. Your critical review, veteran insight, or reader's opinion is greatly appreciated. Thank you in advance for your time and readership.

The Brothers [Complete Short Story]  (E) Two estranged brothers meet to contemplate the meaning of life, religion, and happiness. #2304488 by Edified Ronin

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 Genre(s):  Regional • Sci-fi • Drama
 Type:  Short Story
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Since I haven’t gotten any reviews on my SpaceHorrors short stories yet, I was debating whether to ask for a review or not. I figured I might as well. After all, I do have a few weeks until the end of the month. Maybe I will get one or two this month.

The Creators at the Pleasure Paradise  (18+) A new Paradise Land Mass was about to open. Along with its very own DeathBringer. #2304456 by PureSciFi

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 Genre(s):  Cultural • History • Other
 Type:  Poetry
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Hi there! The prompt for this was "the importance of roots". I've been on a black history kick lately, & I would love some feedback on this one--although I do really like it. I'm happy to exchange a review of your item of comparable length. Thanks!

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We Planted Roots  (13+) I found a prompt somewhere that said to write about "the importance of roots"... #2300982 by elizjohn

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 Genre(s):  Nature • Cultural • History
 Type:  Poetry
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Hi! I wrote this for the Cramp. We had to title it "September Storm" & one of the genres had to be nature. The nature part threw me for a whirl but then I decided to go left with it. Would love your thoughts. I'll exchange a review of comparable length.

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September Storm  (13+) They wanted to stop the storm but they couldn't. #2304277 by elizjohn

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • Action/Adventure • Nature
 Type:  Novel
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Hi, wanna swap reviews?!

Would love to hear an HONEST opinion about this fantasy novel (chapter 1). I'm trying to write in a quick and nimble fantasy style - not trying to spend two pages describing a mountain range. Don't care about grammar.

Old Magic  (13+) Ayu breathes magic, like all his people do. His story begins with a battle he can't win. #2303991 by JulianBenabides

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 Genre(s):  Comedy • Adult • Inspirational
 Type:  Poetry
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Song that I have been writing and editing on and off since around 2005. First time posted here.
Have the music in my head to go with it, upbeat and fairly fast.

I would really appreciate honest reviews and ratings

Gonna Live until I Die!  (E) Song I have been writing forever, trying to "fine tune" it, forgive the pun. also a poem. #2303976 by Elby Wordsmith

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 Genre(s):  Other • History • Family
 Type:  Chapter
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Any reviews are welcomed and appreciated!!!

A Petulant Life part 2  (E) Violet- Early Life #2303763 by Chasing Grace

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 Genre(s):  Children's • Folklore • Inspirational
 Type:  Poetry
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I have completeda set of 21 short poems (8 lines each) and illustrations for a childrens picture book. The complete project review is worth 10,500 points. Review of individual poems are worth 250 points per item Details in linked project introduction,

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A Children's Book of Tarot  (E) A children's book of timeless wisdom #2301783 by Shepard

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 Genre(s):  Sci-fi • Death • Other
 Type:  Sample
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Scarlett reads the mind of a man she is stalking and learns as much about her own history as about Brannon.

For the Love of a Class-Nine  (13+) Scarlett discovers who the real hero is--and always was, before the upgrade. #2301440 by Joto-Kai

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • Dark • Action/Adventure
 Type:  Chapter
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New writer, wanted some criticism since I wanted to get into writing stories!

Arcane Ascension: Prologue   (13+) Young heroes unite, wielding magic against a dark force to save their world, Nova Zora. #2300244 by Zachary Wright

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 Genre(s):  Romance/Love • Fantasy • Teen
 Type:  Short Story
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This is an almost 8,000 word story about a girl visiting the most quiet and relaxing town that anyone could ever visit. But there's much more than that.

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Tingle Town  (ASR) Welcome to Tingle Town! Where you can relax! Or will you? #2273275 by Leslie Loo

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 Genre(s):  Friendship • Experience • Emotional
 Type:  Short Story
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Character development, flow, transitions, hitting all elements of a strong short story. Thank you. tracker

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The Wallet  (E) Returning from Chicago, an exhausted Victoria stops for breakfast. #2299337 by tracker

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 Genre(s):  Romance/Love • Relationship • Psychology
 Type:  Poetry
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I am looking to improve the visual nature and completeness of a metaphor within my poems, trying to not hang too many new ideas off a single structure. Any criticism would be valuable to me.

Beholder's Bloom  (E) A problem--a beautiful one #2299166 by Slight

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 Genre(s):  Crime/Gangster • Horror/Scary • Action/Adventure
 Type:  Novella
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A little Gothic True Crime HORROR, that has a couple spots of gore. It's novela length, but I don't capture you in the first page then it doesn't really matter HOW short or long it is, now does it. I look forward to your review, and ENJOY.

LUCKIEST DAY OF MY LIFE  (GC) Racists kidnap a man intent on making an example.WARNING: Physical injury &use of N-word. #2298867 by John Yossarian

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 Genre(s):  Animal • Career • Personal
 Type:  Non-fiction
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This is a nonfiction piece about my daily life on the job. Please tell me what needs to be fixed as I'm looking to do more with this piece in the future.

For The [Supposed] Love of Dogs  (13+) A typical day at a chaotic, laborious job. #2298831 by Artful Flower

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 Genre(s):  Adult • Thriller/Suspense • Business
 Type:  Sample
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Hi! Long-time member though have been off-line for over 10 years. This is the first I've written in a very long time and I'm looking for honest reviews and feedback to get me back on-track. This is a short introduction to a new character.

Jackson:Chronicles of an Executive Coach  (ASR) Jackson, international executive coach and corporate spy. Will he meet his match? #2298003 by adamthe_uh_writer

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 Genre(s):  Emotional • Children's • Family
 Type:  Other
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This is a children's book meant to have full color illustrations. I would like honest reviews of the story.

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Lilly's pig  (E) A children's book describing my daughter's hospital stay through they eyes of her pig. #1910439 by kat

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 Genre(s):  Biographical • Personal • Experience
 Type:  Novella
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This is a memoir of the difficult times I experienced in my youth and their knock-on effects on my adult life. I'd appreciate feedback on any aspect of this work.

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My Girdle Is Killing Me!  (18+) Memoir. A quiet teenage boy struggles to cope when school bullying takes a sadistic turn. #2294117 by Dave Ryan

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 Genre(s):  Philosophy • Scientific • None
 Type:  Poetry
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Hello, today is my first day on this site. I just recently decided to put more effort into my writing, and to maintain it as one of the critical elements of my life, until I die. I am not sure what to expect from this site, yet. Please be very critical.

"Consciousness" (Circa 2023)  (E) In the future, we know better. #2296425 by Slight

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 Genre(s):  Dark • Adult • Drama
 Type:  Short Story
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Please review this intro to a short story I have in mind. I'm looking to expand on it in the future.

The Monster Inside The Bottle  (18+) A son ponders whether people will discover his father's dark past. #2296222 by Artful Flower

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 Genre(s):  Family • Holiday • Inspirational
 Type:  Fiction
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This was a prompted story: Write a story about a Mother's Day experience. Maximum 500 words.

A Mother's Love  (E) Everlasting. Unconditional. #2295662 by jamisonbrown

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 Genre(s):  Romance/Love • Friendship • Young Adult
 Type:  
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Howdy! I'm new to the site. Working on my first fiction (Romance Novel). Would love getting a feedback about how I'm doing. Constructive review will be much appreciated! Thanks before :)

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Finding Lika  (18+) Lika was Henry Kingsley's PA & best friend. He messed up & vowed to get her back. ROMANCE #2295091 by Natalie Rushman

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